When I was “adjusting” some scenes in the romantic thriller, one of the comments a beta made was for me to add a rekindling scene. While I contemplated what, and how, to add the extra scene, my muse spat this one out. Since I have no room for it in the story, I decided to share it here.
Hope you enjoy!
A Poem

Down on one knee
with nothing to offer
but a beating heart
and a broken soul
and moments in time
with no guarantees
to happiness or sadness.
–
Those soft hands
that took the tribute
Served as a cage
with cruel spikes
that poked and prodded
the tissues of the heart
because those fingers
found it lacking
and threw the heart away
leaving behind
a pulpy mess
jagged with scars.
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And years went by
and a kind face
offered smiles
and moonlight walks
and soothed the hurt
and proffered to make
the two a one
by trying to heel
the pain and the misery
of a broken soul
who preferred this time
to play it safe
and refused to go
across the street
or near the edge
where it had once been
on one knee
with a pulpy heart
and a broken soul
once filled with love
now filled with regret
of an imagined life
that will never be
because that heart
had never been
whole to begin with.
So poignant. Beautifully done, Jina.
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Thank you!
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Very poignant, Jina. Your word choices evoke such strong emotions. Wonderful!
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This is beautiful, Jina!
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Thanks, Teri!
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Wow! Beautiful, Jina. Thank you for sharing.
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My pleasure, Jill. Thanks for the lovely comment and have a wonderful day!
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Touching heart and soul…
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Hi, Bette! Thanks for dropping by and for the lovely comment.
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Nicely drawn word image. I enjoyed it, Jina. That picture–I sure hope it’s Photoshopped.
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Ah, but I have no idea. Found it on pixabay tagged as “living on the edge” with “shack on a cliff”. I hope it fits with the poem.
Thanks for the visit and have a wonderful day!
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Very ni-ice, which I’m happy to say twice. 🙂
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Thanks, Tyler!
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I love this! It’s so beautiful and sad…
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Thank you!
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Wonderful stuff. Well, that would rekindle things for me! How did the scene go?
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It went great! I even thought about adding some details that would enrich the next scene.
Thanks for dropping by and have a lovely night.
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Good to hear. Sometimes standing back from writing really helps. I have seen it compared to mountain climbing – we can only see a short distance ahead when climbing, but sometimes it’s useful to assess the whole mountain.
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So true!
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The beginning was sad, the end beautiful…
Love, light and glitter
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Thank you!
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Oh, the things our muses toss out sometimes 🙂 How lovely!
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Thank you! My muse is mostly laid back, but sometimes she turns blue.
Thanks for the visit, M.B!
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wow this sounds like so many womens story! Deeply profound … healing enough to take risks again is not an easy path … very moving
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you’re most welcome
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You did a great job in revealing how hard it is to trust….
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Thanks!
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The muse did a lovely job, Jina, though a sad one. Your poem is beautiful and moving. ❤
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Sad and beautiful, Jina! Is this insight to come in your new novel?
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Nah, I was on my bike, considering the feedback about rekindling and how the mc should be feeling after all he went through – yes, the poem was a male pov – when I thought about this. I paused the bike and typed down the last few lines, then went back and wrote the beginning.
Thanks for dropping by Denise, I’ll be emailing soon.
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Wonderful! Describes the emotions so well and vividly.
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Beautiful! I think everyone can relate to the emotions you evoke here.
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Powerful, Jina- well done!
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So simple and so beautiful! I was hoping at heart though that he would give in a second time, and many more times over. There is after all a fatalist in every romantic heart.
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He does in the story, but here, I suppose my muse wanted the other side of the coin.
Thanks for the visit and have a nice day!
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amazing work
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Thanks!
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Thank you sooo much 😊
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Thanks!
I’ll come over for a visit – we’ve all been there as the new kid on the block.
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♥️♥️ exactly!! Thanks a ton for being so nice and sweet!!!
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Very interesting poem. Sometimes we just need to move back from the cliff to solid ground and rethink what it was that made us think living on the edge was such a good thing!
Dwight
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So true.
Thanks for the visit and have a great weekend!
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A lovely way to write about emotions. By the way, the quote comes from Marcus Tullius Cicero – A room without books is like a body without a soul.
Thanks for your kind comment about The Thames post.
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Thank you.
Hope you have a wonderful week!
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A pulpy mess jagged with scars💔
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🙂
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That was wonderful. The image of a heart crossing the street. So evocative. Are you sure you have no room for it in the story?
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Sadly, no. Plus, in the story, the heart accepted the second chance for love.
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Beautiful!!!
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Thank you!
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Detailed, deep and poignant
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Thank you!
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Welcome
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“because that heart
had never been
whole to begin with.”
Yes ❤
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🙂
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so pretty – many tx for sharing, Jina 🙂
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Thanks!
And apologies for the late response.
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This is so beautiful
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This was just a gorgeous poem. Thank you for posting it.
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Was going to write something but Cath’s first comment said it for me really 🙂
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Thanks. Hope you have a nice day!
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You too 😊
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